Date: 09 May 2009 1:48 pm Title: Pathetic
Interesting story, but your thoughts for Rosalie are too modern. For example "hot girl" was not used in the 1930s. I like the last line. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response: this story was told in past tense, rosalie didn't have to be thinking it in the 30s. thanks for the review :]