Date: 04 Mar 2011 10:46 pm Title: Lavender Smoke
I enjoyed reading both Jasper and Alice's POV about this time in their history. You made it very plausible within canon.
Something I haven't read in any other story is an exploration of Jasper's scars.
It's also interesting to think that even at the end he did care about Maria's feelings. And did her sob when he left mean she cared about him?
I like your theme of lavender smoke. "...I had no hope but to become like so many before me, lavender smoke."
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the amazing review! Any response gives me the much needed boost to continue writing. On the topic of Jaspers scars, they have always facinated me, not only was he scarred in the physical sense emotionally too. Regarding Maria, she's a complicated subject to fathom... though I will leave the interpretation up to the reader. The theme of 'LS' occured to me from reading the Bree Tanner novella. Bree (I believe) describes the smoke emitting from the burning pyres as 'lavender' in colour, it got me thinking about Jaspers past. Thank you again for taking the time to review, and I hope I haven't bored you with my repose.
Date: 03 Nov 2010 10:27 pm Title: Lavender Smoke
Beautiful and sensitive. Just like Jasper. His before life has always been a mystery. Just the bare bones of what happened to him. Very much like what you created. There was never any doubt Alice was his soul mate.
Author's Response: Thank you for your kind words, I really do appreciate them. I whole-heartedly agree with you, Jasper found his soulmate in Alice.
Date: 26 Oct 2010 3:42 pm Title: Lavender Smoke
I had read Visions first and there were some parts that seemed to not make sense. After reading this story I noticed that some of the dialog was missing from Alice's story. Especially when Jasper and Alice are talking about why her eyes are golden. That whole conversation was skipped. Also the conversation between Jasper and Rosalie was missing pieces. Now that I've read this story, Alice's story make more sense. Both were great stories and I enjoyed reading them. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response: Firstly, thank you for reviewing, I really do appreciate the feedback. ooops, thank you for pointing out parts I skipped, I did not realise. I usually show my work to a friend before I post it, I didn't do it for 'Visions' and I'm sure it shows. Thank you so much for your feedback, and I'm glad Lavender Smoke clears a few things up :D Fx
Date: 25 Oct 2010 1:42 am Title: Lavender Smoke
The title fits really well. I liked the interaction between Jasper and Maria as he was leaving. Wonder what he was thinking in Eclipse with the new born problem, especially the clean up and lavender smoke again.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for review. I really do appreciate it :D. The idea for lavender smoke came from Bree Tanner, she mentions somewhere in the novella that the smoke is purple lol. Thank you again for taking the time to review I really do appreciate it :D Fx
Date: 24 Oct 2010 8:53 pm Title: Lavender Smoke
Very well written! You seem to have caught Jasper just like I imagined him. The time with Peter and Charlotte was too short for my liking, but he had to meet Alice and the Cullens, so you did a good job.
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to reveiw. I really do appreciate it. I agree, Peter and Charlotte are intreguing characters all on their own. Maybe I should write a spin off? lol I cannot wait to see how summitt use them in the BD films. Thanks again Fx