Date: 26 Apr 2011 11:15 am Title: Riding In My Car
I don't think she was too hard on him. But he didn't get off easy either. These two more mature characters are actually talking more and explaning more rather than assuming things that usually turned out to be wrong anyway. Once they get together and continue to talk like this, likely be happier and better adjusted than original characters.
Date: 26 Apr 2011 10:36 am Title: Reunion & Revelation
So we have the title of your story, nicely ties in with how the meet again. Also like your chapter titles. It looks like you are weaving in some lines from original in slightly different situations -- very nice and clever. Loved Bella protecting Edward and talking Embry down. So the pack took out James and Laurent and now Victoria is after the pack with Bella possibly in the way. Oh this is going to be good. But have to have their car ride conversation and find out what has happened to Bella in five years.
Date: 25 Apr 2011 11:53 pm Title: Ghosts of the Past
Ok, her feet have remained swept off; but she did stand up to him. They are both so confused and conflicted and assigning wrong thoughts/emotions to what they are seeing. And she knows he's a vampire and she has guard dogs, so she knows about the werewolves. Seth isn't one yet, no smell bad thoughts or actions from Edward after Seth hugged Bella. Experiences? lead to finding out about wolves and vampires? I'll keep reading and find out. And yes this more mature Bella is great, go kick his sorry behind, get answers. Edward had his hands full with Bella in SM's, he's going to get more than he bargained for with your older wiser Bella.
Date: 25 Apr 2011 8:12 pm Title: Running, Climbing, Falling
Not keep accurate count of time, is he? I like your "what if" point of departure, before they talked and got to know each other. Edward and Jasper's conversation is interesting. Nice that Jasper is kind of on his side and both wondering about human/vampire mates. I like this more mature set up. Child could be a roommate's. She seemed happy, seemed is the key word. Guess we will have to wait to hear her side of the last five years. Two small typo's in this chapter and will send those from home computer later today. Exciting to see where / how you proceed with this.
Thank you, that would be appreciated. I can only try to catch it all. :-) Thanks for another review! ~Ginnie