Date: 07 Jan 2010 2:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like your Jasper POV a lot. I can really see him.
I like hearing his thoughts about how Bella isn't scared enough. I really like the end.
One thing though, in one paragraph you say he felt the fear around her, then right after that he says there must be fear there that he was missing.
Date: 20 Jan 2008 3:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really enjoyed it. You really captured Jasper's point of view well.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I love writing from Jasper's POV, he's so interesting, and by far my favourite character. If you wanted more like that, have a look at 'Training', which has a chapter from his POV.
Date: 18 Oct 2007 4:18 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like it a lot!! I think you should add more to this story, I want to know what happens after their conversation.
Author's Response: Thank you! I really didn't plan on writing any more of this. I'll have a think though, and if I come up with something, maybe I'll write another bit.
Date: 04 Oct 2007 2:39 am Title: Chapter 1
You kept them in character so well.
It was so cute when Bella hugged Jasper, a brother sister moment!
You SHOULD add to this! You're a great writer.
Kepp it up!
Author's Response: Thanks very much! That's a really nice review, very helpful :) If I think of something that would go with this, I might continue it, but it could take a while - I've got a lot to write at the moment. Thanks again dragon-girl
Date: 27 Sep 2007 4:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
I think you should add to this. You're really good at writing
Author's Response: Thanks very much. I'm not planning on adding to this particular one, because as a description of how Jasper feels while hunting, it's complete. I'm still writing other stories about Jasper though, and I hope you like them as well.
Date: 05 Sep 2007 9:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
I laughed at that last line. Edward's reluctance is harder on Jasper than anyone, except maybe Bella herself, for different reasons. Very entertaining to read. Thanks!
Author's Response: Glad I made you laugh : ) I was curious about how the other Cullens felt about Edward wanting to wait to change her. We get a small insight into it in The Vote in NM, but not much apart from that. Thanks very much for reviewing! :D